نمونه رایتینگ تصحیح شده آیلتس

نمونه رایتینگ تصحیح شده آیلتس

نمونه رایتینگ تصحیح شده  از یکی از زبان آموزان دوره آیلتس ترم اول، شامل دو قسمت task 1 و task 2 در آیلتس آکادمیک:

Task1:

  The given diagram illustrates  the amount of utilizing annual a cell phone and residential phone in the US .As is presented in the diagram is shown a lot of fluctuations in either cell phone or residential phone . That’s the first item has ascendant process, but the second item has des (spelling) ending process.

   According to the diagram, the amount of using of cell phone in 2001 was a little up $ 200 and is increased until 2010 to (at) around $ 800 while in the second item the highest amount of use was $ 700 in early 2001 and the lowest that was in 2010 at was about $ 320 .

  Overall , both of  the items have a reversible process than each other , in other words it can say cause of the progress in technology and easy usage it is extend (is extended ;passive form) in society in over times.

Task 2:

Nowadays money is the most important item for human life. Another term the life without money, that is becomes very difficult or even impossible. Not only in developed countries, but also in developing and poor countries to getting money is main point. (in superior adjectives we need “the”; i.e: the best—the main point)

According to investigations by the world business all of the world ahead with shortage of money which is increasing gradually and a lot of people live in a level called under of the poverty line

As said as the money is crucial in our world and it can be one of success factors in business, education, welfare and all of life fields. Although it is necessary, but it isn’t cause to achievement: and we can see a lot of people who don’t have any money whereas they are prosperity in their life.

In my opinion, to earning a lot of or little money isn’t the main point of success, but the principal matter is its management. in fact correct direction can be due to successful.

Thanks. But about “The”:

۱.      Use the to refer to something which has already been mentioned.

There’s a position available in my team. The job will involve some international travel

۲.      when you assume there is just one of something in that place, even if it has not been mentioned before.

My father enjoyed the book you gave him.

۳.      in sentences or clauses where you define or identify a particular person or object.

The man who wrote this book is famous.

۴.      to refer to people or objects that are unique.

You can go anywhere in the world.

۵.      before superlatives and ordinal numbers.

She read the last chapter of her new book first.

۶.      with decades.

This is a painting from the 1820’s.

۷.      with countries that have plural names and countries that include the words “republic“, “kingdom“, or “states” in their names.

She is visiting the United States.

James is from the Republic of Ireland.

۸.      with the names of famous buildings, works of art, museums, monuments,newspaper names.

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